It all started on one enchanting moonlit night
When white serene light was falling on his face
At the time, when the dusk had kissed goodnight
He felt as in from another time and place
When white serene light was falling on his face
The sight of his smiling face was all I could see
He felt as in from another time and place
And all I could hear was the voice of the sea
The sight of his smiling face was all I could see
In the moonlight, when quietness crept up the hill
And all I could hear was the voice of the sea
We just sat there as the woods grew darker still
In the moonlight when quietness crept up the hill
I knew in my heart - it's now or never
We just sat there as the woods grew darker still
And he had my heart for now and forever
I knew in my heart - it's now or never
At the time, when the dusk had kissed goodnight
And he had my heart for now and forever
It all started on one enchanting moonlit night...
It all started on one enchanting moonlit night...
I loved the form of the poetry, while he had your heart forever!
ReplyDeleteNice use of the form.
ReplyDeletevery cool pantoum....the dance of the lines and repetitions really makes this sing...and plays off the magic of the moment you are describing....
ReplyDeletehm..very romantic, and nice that you used a form for it.
ReplyDeleteYou did well with the pantoum form, Ankita. Lovely romance in this poem.
ReplyDeletethis pantoum was perfect for the beautiful emotions described here...an enjoyable read Ankita :)
ReplyDeleteThe pantoum is my favorite form and you have used it to perfection here - this poem is steeped in romance and moonlight..........very beautiful!
ReplyDeleteCan feel that moment slowly gathering and then lingering! Pantoum form is perfect for this. It gives the sense that the moment and what it symbolizes will last.
ReplyDeleteI appreciate the form but enjoyed the subject regardless.
ReplyDeleteSimply beautiful.
ReplyDeleteHow beautifully romantic! I love the atmosphere of your poem, the serenity and the moonlight night.
ReplyDeletesighing in satisfaction over your romantic piece here! i feel like i'm back in my teenage years crushing on someone i had admired, living in my own Aladdin fairy-tale....beautiful....indeed
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Yes! this was an exercise in my last writing group. Simple as my imagination allowed me to be. Made me think, before writing the next line. And then I argued, "let it flow... as I spoke to thee ''...but it held me hostage to the the previous thought that had to be explained, and, complete!
ReplyDeleteYou did well! Bravo!
ZQ